Post Blog # 20- Reviews

Last blog!!! =-)
The reviews I received on 5/8/07 were very similar to the ones I gotten back on 5/10/07. On one of the review sheets on 5/8/07 stated that I needed to put more work on describing, relating, and evaluating each of the sources I used. In addition, I gotten a respond saying that I need to relate my facts to the thesis of the essay and had minor grammar errors that needed to be fixed. On the other review sheet, dated on 5/8/07, I gotten better responds; however, these two reviews from two different people were very similar (the ones on 5/8/07). When I looked at the 3 different sheets(2 on 5/8 and 1 one 5/10), the basic comments were close and there were not many differences.
Contrary to the reviews on 5/8, the review I received on 5/10 was (since there was only one review sheet) slightly different (but there were difference comments). On the 5/10 paper, the two strongest elements of the essay comments, see if my argument was clear throughout the essay comments, and what other soruces I incorporated comments were different. The second peer review sheet was, I believe, fully explained more of what I needed to include in the essay and what was correct. In other words, the second review (received on 5/10) was, I think, better explained and clear of what was right or wrong. When I read the comments, I had a better understanding of what the reviewer was saying and that basically the main differences between the three review sheets.
For my essay, when I will start doing the final draft, I will delete some facts (not much)because I feel I put a little too much. Also, I will try to add a paragraph saying how people view the Statue of Liberty or make a stronger arugment saying how people feel about the statue. The changes I will correct are the size of the title/work cited, fix my grammar structure, delete information that is irrelavent, change my meanings of the sentences, and single space my citations (instead of double space). Also, on the "new rough drafts" I added a paragraph about how the Statue of Liberty represent a good characteristic of American Culture and how the government is keeping an eye on the artifact. So the basic idea is that I will try to explain more on how The Lady Liberty represents American Culture, how different people view it, and include great details!! The final draft will be better and feel it will relate to the topic more. Done!